
The April 17, 2023 99-word story challenge from Charli Mills at Carrot Ranch is to: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story of something/someone dark-eyed. What could be a dark-eyed situation? Or is it a dark-eyed beauty? A dark-eyed junco? Maybe it’s a futuristic piece of technology. Go where the prompt leads! Submit by April 22, 2023.
Be sure to go to Carrot Ranch to read the complete “Old Lady and the Beast collection” from last week‘s challenge.
Rabbit by D. Avery
I try not to tense up in my stillness. I wait, listening, controlling my breath so it doesn’t give me away.
Hunting’s about taking everything in, about knowing what to look for, and where. The winter hare, crouched perfectly still, disappears into the snow, invisible but for its shiny black eyes that watch the muzzle rise. At night, the racoon makes its escape into the tree branches, but its eyes, red in the searching light, provide a target.
I stay hidden, perfectly still. I listen to the hunter taking everything in, searching for me. My eyes are shut tight.

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Brilliantly written, D! On first read I thought the narrator was the hunter, and the twist that the narrator is not surprised me.
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Thanks! The first thing I thought of with this prompt were animal eyes, round and black like a rabbit’s or a mink’s. This is where that led.
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Very nice. I like this from the rabbit’s POV.
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Thanks! A little grim, but fun to write.
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Many skills are needed both for the hunter and the hunted. (K)
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Similar skills.
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You took me into this moment. Very well written
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Thank you. This was fun to write, though it’s a bit dark.
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You’re welcome
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I love how we are brought around from hunter to hunted and how the eyes are the beacons so best keep them shut to remain undiscovered.
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Thanks. Once I had the idea it wrote itself. Sort of. Either way I’m glad you liked it.
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🙂
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enjoyed this dark suspense! 🖤✍️🖤
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Thanks!
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💓
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Oh, I do like this. On every level! 🙂
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Ooh… nice little twist there at the end!
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Great tension in this piece. Yes – keep those eyes shut tight!
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