
The April 3, 2023 99-word story challenge from Charli Mills at Carrot Ranch is to: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a dog in the desert. Why is the dog there? Who else is involved? Is there a deeper metaphor you can make of the desert? Go where the prompt leads! Submit by April 8, 2023.
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Trust In Dog by D. Avery
I don’t have the energy, or time, to explain how I got lost in the desert.
The dog appeared like a miracle.
A feral dog, but a dog nonetheless. It watched me with calm curiosity, then looked expectantly over its shoulder at me. I followed. The dog walked and waited, as I stumbled after it to this small canyon, where there is water.
But the dog bares its teeth and won’t let me drink. Exhausted, I wait on the sunbaked ground, amongst the scattered bones of other believers. Tumbling from their den, yipping pups squirm, impatient for their meal.

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A beautiful tale leaving me with no need for more of it and a desire for more at the same time. What a pleasure to behold. ❤
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Thank you. I think this is a definite case of less is more. The first draft was about 150 words. I think this pared down version is better. And in doing so I thought to switch the narration to present tense, which improves the story, it makes more sense.
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I’m a short as possible story lover. I think your instincts were excellent.
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It’s why I love the 99-word challenge. It makes you think and choose.
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This is almost spooky, D. The recognition of death is so powerful!
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I didn’t have to add any spooky elements. The fact that it is a dog, and the expectations we have of them, makes it spooky. Glad I followed this idea!
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Agreed. It’s a great piece and sucked me into the story immediately.
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Thanks!
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Ooh! An unexpected turn in the story
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Yep. This was fun to write.
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👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
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Wow! That did not go where I expected and I love that. Wonderfully done!
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Gotcha!
Thanks Dale.
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Hi Ms. D, this is very clever and very true to nature.
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Thank you. I had fun getting this idea to 99 words.
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Excellent. (K)
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Thank you.
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This is such a lovely Tale🌹🤗
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Thanks, I’m glad you liked it.
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Such a well-written story with a great twist at the end. That ending makes you think. It could go well or bad, but the silent spookiness was the winner and held the answer for me. It’s almost as if the dark side of the story is hidden and can only be seen by some readers.
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Thanks Hugh, much appreciated. I did intend it dark, as you have read it.
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Good to hear, D. From some of the other comments, though, I don’t think the dark side came over. But I like that because it’s always good to hear from different perspectives. And with it only being 99 words, I’m sure everyone has read it.
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It’s hard to accept a sinister dog perhaps. I also didn’t want to over do it, I like a somewhat open-ended flash.
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Same here. And with this story, you got one.
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