#99Word Stories; Freedom

The June 20, 2022 story challenge from Charli Mills at Carrot Ranch is to: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about what freedom feels like. Whose point of view do you use? Does the idea of freedom cause tension or bring hope? Let the reader feel the freedom. Go where the prompt leads!

My first response to this prompt is a Double Ennead, the 99 syllable form created by Colleen Chesebro. The second response features fictional characters that you may recall from other flashes.

In Sight by D. Avery

Freedom is first brave steps

finding one’s bearings

following a star blazed path— sight in darkness.

Freedom is the light

you’ll never lose your way.

*

Freedom is essential

feeding your spirit

it satisfies your needs and you do not want

Freedom is bold faith

you’ll always have enough.

*

Freedom is rock solid

sure-footed comfort

of knowing you are loved without conditions.

Freedom is the love

you receive and you give.

Planting Ideas by D. Avery    

Hope planted the little flags where her dad directed, starting with his grandfather who’d served in WWI and ending with his ancestors who had fought in the Revolution.

“And now a parade!”

“That’s right Hope, the Bicentennial Parade. Celebrating two hundred years of freedom.”

“Did your ancestors fight for freedom Mommy?”

“Always, Hope.” She paused to look down the tree-shaded slope to where a small marker stood just outside the cemetery fence. “But we lost.”

“Everyone’s free in America, Mommy.”

A feather drifted silently down from a towering maple. Picking it up, she wondered at the power of myths.

Be sure to go to Carrot Ranch to read the complete “Danger Zone collection from last week. And there’s always the Ranch Yarns with Kid and Pal’s responses HERE.

17 thoughts on “#99Word Stories; Freedom

    • That’s too true, Norah. I’m discovering that while Hope’s dad thinks of himself as a Vermont native with deep roots in that brave little state, her mom actually has the longer history of the place, though her ancestors were displaced and dispersed. And it’s not over. I’m very concerned for the rights of First Nations people with this current “supreme” court.

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    • Thank you. I am slowly having it revealed to me that Hope’s story is her mother’s story, am learning that her mother is not only French Canadian but is also Abenaki, an original “New England” group who has been in the middle of European conflicts since the 1600s.

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  2. The US is a young ‘country’ – some believe it isn’t really theirs to own. But then that would also be true for the entire world and those people who came before who felt that none owned the land at all.

    Like the story of the first Eve…not the biblical one but the one from Africa. It is amazing how the the majority of the world’s DNA comes from that frist Eve.

    Lovely writes. I can only go back so far. From another country. Everyone seems to leave homelands for better futures. One can only hope that occasionally that is achieved.

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  3. Standing with one’s head above the mist and breathing the sweet air of freedom, makes one forget that one’s feet are on the necks of those smothering in the dank mist of subjugation…!
    🇯🇲🏖️

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