d’Verse Prosery; Bombarded

At long last I return to one of my favorite watering holes, the d’Verse pub for poets where Merril is hosting Prosery Monday. “Prosery is a dVerse word for prose incorporating a given line of poetry. This can be either flash fiction, nonfiction, or creative nonfiction, but it must be prose! Not prose poetry, and not a poem. And it must be no longer than 144 words, not including the title.”

Today’s line is from Adrienne Rich’s poem, “Planetarium”: I am bombarded yet I stand.

I have been trying to do a little something every day with my Marge and Ernest characters for NaNoWriMO with or without a prompt. This prompt worked for them. My entry is exactly 144 words and is a continuation to a recent Carrot Ranch Literary Community prompt.

Standing By Friends

“Knock it off Nick,” Ernest said. “If Ilene wanted you to know she’d tell you. Stop bombarding her with questions about her leg.” 

Ilene yelled drunkenly. “I am bombarded! Yet I stand. On one leg.”

“I’m just curious. I don’t get what the big deal is, why you have to keep it a secret.”

“Nick! Stop. She doesn’t have to tell you.”

“I’ll tell you this Nick. Shhh, it’s a secret.”

“Ilene, you are drunk.”

“You shhh too Marge. Listen up for the secret. It’s a family secret. The whole family tree is full of missing limbs, even eyes. We’re pirates, see, yeah. Piracy is my leg-acy. But we’re sworn to see-crecy.” 

“Thank god we’re here. First stop— Ilene.” 

“Good night Pegleg!”

“Good nick Night.”

“Easy there Ilene.”

“I lean on you Marge.” 

“You are some drunk.”

“I am bombed. Yet I stand.”

“Barely.”

41 thoughts on “d’Verse Prosery; Bombarded

  1. Funny story, D., and I’m pleased it worked with your characters. The part about the family secret made me laugh.
    *A reminder that you can’t insert words into the prompt line. You need to move “cried Ilene drunkenly.”
    But I like how you changed it to bombed at the end.

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  2. Interesting, like reading a page taken from the middle of a book and trying to get the drift of things! I enjoyed the forbidden change of bombarded to bombed!

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    • Thanks! Because it kind of is a page from the middle of my muddling. These are recurring characters who have no regard for where their prompts come from. I am trying to thread their scenes together into something cohesive and comprehensible. Thanks for indulging them here.

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  3. You may, or may not know, I have composed 145 2-page episodes from my novel, BLACKTHORNE, which stretches back over 8 years, using 15 characters in the Western genre. Everything is in my archives if you want to check them out. I enjoyed your character’s chatter.

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  5. This is why I love prompts, especially delicious ones such as a line from poetry. You might have intended to write a scene about Ilene’s stubbornness to divulge her missing limb in conflict with a curious friend. Add booze, and the scene goes off the rails with the character. But the prompt has given you a specific detail. Any chance we get, we must give our characters objects as well as emotions, thoughts, and plot points. This is great writing and the characters are holding up. Well, except Ilene.

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