One Good Turn

One Good Turn

He paced the porch before coming back inside and bolting the door. He tensed at the window when a truck went by.

“You’re nervous as a cat tonight.”

“I never made the meeting.”

“Good! I wish you never went to those hateful gatherings. If your business here depends on the Klan I’d rather move away! But you’ve missed meetings before. What’s wrong?”

“I took Angela and that girl Celia to the vet’s. Celia’s cat got hit… Her parents met us there. Buzz drove by and saw us together.”

Pulling the curtain aside, he peered anxiously into the dark night.


Chelsea’s right.  

He leaned on the doorjamb looking in on his sleeping daughter. His wife slipped under his arm. “She is so beautiful,” she whispered.

“She’s my light.” They walked back to the living room.

“You’re nervous as a cat tonight. What’s wrong? You’ve missed those awful ‘meetings’ before.” She twisted her blonde bangs, showing her own anxiety. “I wish you never went. No job is worth it.”

“I took Angela and that girl Celia to the vet’s. Celia’s cat got hit… Her parents met us there. Buzz saw us.”

Pulling the curtain aside again, he peered into the dark night.


working-template-for-ff-challenges82.png   At Carrot Ranch the November 29, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story using the phrase “into the dark.” What must a character face? Write about an encounter, journey, relationship, or quest. Follow the ship’s lights on gloomy seas. Go where the prompt leads you.” Respond by December 4, 2018.

This story follows a  response for a Carrot Ranch prompt back in August 2017, The Meeting .

7 thoughts on “One Good Turn

  1. Yeah I wondered about that, this one not really standing on its own. Even if you read the one it follows (The Meeting) it may not have enough detail. Maybe I should rewrite it with a more clear clue.
    I appreciate your saying so.


  2. I’m thinking the crossed out one is an earlier version? I do prefer the new. Well done. What a sad situation to be in — forced to behave in a way with which you are not comfortable.


  3. Oh, I remember that flash! I’d love to see them paired, and while it would expand the context, I think this stands on its own, too. I get the fear and the surprise at not going to the meeting and now being at odds instead of being safe. That’s why many people get involved in such ugliness.


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