Having never heard of a tritina before I thought I would try the the fussy little form challenge put out by imaginary gardens with real toads. Here is their definition of tritina: It is a ten-line poem with three tercets and a final line, featuring three repeating, non-rhyming line-end words, like this:

I am also using this form to respond to Sammi Cox’s Weekend Writing prompt # 76 in which she asks for 63 words in response to “unlock”.
**** *** **** *** ****
Mute angers pace within their pen
the locked gate a stubborn silence
the key misplaced like blame.
Picking through strewn blame
together searching for the key to open
themselves up and end the smothering silence.
On rusty hinges slowly swings the creaky silence
unshackled blame
is let go, anger leaves the unlocked pen.
Repentant apologies break the silence as two shoulder their blame.
Nice 63. D. I like the creaking rusty hinges. I should count words in mine, it will.probably be close to 63 as I have exactly 100 syllables not including the title.
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Hello Jim, thanks for coming by. It’s been a while since I’ve managed a poem but these two prompts seemed the push I needed. I enjoyed the puzzle.
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I like what you’ve done with this one. It flows well and has a sense of ominous foreboding.
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Thanks for coming by, it’s appreciated.
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Wow! That’s tricky. You did well. You even got deep and meaningful within those tight restrictions. And that’s not even starting on the poetry.
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Thanks, Buddy. I haven’t mustered up a poem in a long while, so forced myself. In some ways the restrictions make it easier… just follow the rules. Some of the other people’s tritinas were fantastic. Interesting to play with a new form.
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It was definitely worth the stretch. 🙂
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Yep.
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Wonderful rhythm and rhyme.
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Thanks. It’s funny how a poetic form can mold a rhythm whether one intends it or not.
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It’s the beauty of poetry!
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Love your use of keys and locks. The ending sentence melded the poem together,
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Thank you. I was hoping for that effect.
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There is something ominous about being locked in and those rusty hinges.
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There’s something ominous about silence. There was, I hope, a somewhat happy ending.
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Ahhh… interesting. I really like the third stanza in particular.
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Thank you. Sammi’s 63 word “unlock” prompt helped me forge ahead with the new (to me) and initially constricting tritina form. A fun puzzle. It unlocked a poem!
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