He did not want to take the old man fishing. He had few enough days to relax, dreaded the criticisms that would roll around the boat like rattling cans.

They cast, drifting in the cove.

“How’s work?”

Here we go, he thought. “Fine.”

“You deserve a day off. You work hard.”

Then quiet except for one-word utterances, “Nibble.” “Hit.” Nothing stayed on the line. The old man told about their first time fishing this cove. “We got ‘em that day.”

He had only been four, but he remembered.

Today no fish were landed. “Can I buy you dinner, Dad?”


Written for Carrot Ranch July 13, 2017 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about an unexpected landing. It can be acrobatic, an unplanned move or created into a metaphor. Go where the prompt, or chickens, lead.

9 thoughts on “Landing

  1. They may not have landed any fish, but hopefully some understanding, a meeting of generations. This phrase tells so much in few words: “the criticisms that would roll around the boat like rattling cans”. I know just what that feels like, when nothing one does can be right. Maybe there’s some mellowing here. I hope it continues over dinner.

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  2. You whittled well and nailed the transition. Flash can bring us ideas about how to say what we want, while robbing us of the luxury of saying it in as many words we think it takes. I agree with Norah on this phrase standing out as saying so much: “…criticisms that would roll around the boat like rattling cans.”

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